沈老師英語寫作

? Writing strategies for Senior 3

(以南京零模——羅爾事件為例)


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? 第一段:概述材料內(nèi)容

1.抓大放小:事由、結(jié)果

2.運(yùn)用非謂語、定語從句、介詞結(jié)構(gòu)等讓句子緊湊并表意豐富

3.切忌事無巨細(xì)、引用原文

方法:看懂后,丟掉原文材料

Examples:

1. Luo Er published an article to raise money for the treatment of his daughter’s illness—leukemia and received over 2 million yuan. However, great criticism and heated discussion have been aroused after the confirmation of his ownership of 3 apartments and the comparatively low cost of the treatment. (47 words)? ?

2. Luo Er, who obviously has the ability to afford the treatment for his daughter’s illness-leukemia, raised 75 times his spending on the treatment via Wechat, causing considerable criticism and heated discussion. ? (29 words)

3. Luo Er, whose daughter unfortunately come down with leukemia, managed to raise much more money than actually needed. As a result, he was flooded with considerable criticism from the Internet with more details revealed. (33 words)

Reference:

A father, who posted his daughter’s illness via WeChat raise money for her treatment, was criticized by the public because he had the ability to cover the medical expenses. ?Roger’s version:? The event of Luo Er’s raising money for treating his 5-year-old daughter’s serious illness ---Leukemia has been causing increasing concern and criticism from the public with more and more details revealed.

第二段:文章主體,發(fā)表自己的看法

1.看法就是論述(論證)

首先,必須拋出自己對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象或事件的態(tài)度或觀點(diǎn)?!径蔚闹黝}句

其次,論證自己的觀點(diǎn)或態(tài)度?!愃朴诹谐隼碛桑褐赋龊蠊虮緛碓撚械慕Y(jié)果。根據(jù)情況,可以只是正面陳述,也可以正反兩方面結(jié)合。

2.論述過程中一定要因小見大,即從具體事件中推出一般規(guī)律或道理,切忌就事論事。具體方法,結(jié)合事件發(fā)散開去。

3.注意:思路要清晰,要點(diǎn)之間不重復(fù)、有層次,語句之間應(yīng)有適當(dāng)銜接。

1. Reference:

I’m in complete disagreement with the behavior of the father. It’s apparent that raising money on the Internet is an effective way to help those in need, which can not only assist them in getting through the hardships but also be helpful in creating a harmonious society. However, this father can afford the medical expenses but turned to others for help, which betrayed the public’s trust and made them feel cheated.

2. Roger’s version:

The event itself reflects both social conscience, people’s kindness and also honesty, which are seriously challenged in modern society. On the one hand, people’s generous donation for the girl shows that the majority of the society are still kind, helpful and socially responsible. All the above qualities have been our Chinese traditional virtues for so long a time. On the other hand, Luo Er’s dishonesty and some companies’ so-called marketing exercise, to some extent, means lack and even gradual disappearance of conscience and morality. It’s apparent that collecting money on the Internet is a positive and effective way to help those in need, which can not only assist them in getting through the hardships but also helpful in creating a harmonious society. However, what they did severely betrayed public trust and attitudes towards kindness, making people feel cheated.

第三段:文章結(jié)尾,解決問題或總結(jié)啟示或教訓(xùn)

1.順延第二段的論述,發(fā)表自己對(duì)這類問題或事件的解決辦法或從中得到的啟示。其實(shí),就是該怎么做才是正能量。

2.至少提出2點(diǎn),最后一段一般也可以自成體系,即主題句+2點(diǎn)啟示或建議或做法+總結(jié)句(必要的情況下,不要生搬硬套)

3.注意:不要重復(fù)第二段的語句和思路。結(jié)尾段不是論述事件或問題本身,而是收尾,也就是解決問題的階段。

Roger’s version:

From my personal perspective, only those who are in desperate need can seek for help from others. Meanwhile, the government and relevant authorities should make efforts to enhance the supervision of the identity of those seeking help and get to the truth of their problems.

? An amazing sample?

A man named Luo Er published an article about his 5-year-old daughter’s leukemia to raise money, which, however, turned out to be a cheat. Actually, Luo is much better off than many people and the money he has raised is 75 times his spending on his daughter’s treatment.

Luo made use of the Internet and the kindness of people to get money and undertook little risk, whose behavior was annoying and immoral and of great harm to the society. In case of similar incidents, many people may prefer to refuse or neglect rather than give a hand in fear of falling for a cheat. Thus, trust between people is gradually fading. Moreover, if the man doesn’t get punished (go unpunished), more crimes will be committed and the justice of the society will be destroyed.

Therefore, the government should attach importance to this case and relevant actions should be taken to perfect the law and regulate the society, especially the Internet world. What’s more, the morality should always be our basic principle when we do everything. Only in this way can we protect the justice of the society and strengthen trust between people.

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