我做的推文都比較實在，沒有圖片，就是滿滿的文字，讀完也需要花一定的時間，因為干貨滿滿。被選出來的文章都是寫得非常好的，值得大家反復讀，甚至是可以供大家模仿和背誦的。希望你們能夠細細品，不一定要一次性讀完，可以分多次來讀。你一定要通過讀別人的文章，在比較中，才能知道自己的寫作離一篇優(yōu)秀作文的差距，這樣你才有方向，才有目標。

這是本次英語小測（Unit1-4）的寫作要求：

節(jié)約資源，保護地球，從我們身邊的小事做起。假設你是一個注重“低碳”生活的中學生，請以“My Low-carbon Life”為題，寫一篇短文，簡單描述自己的“低碳生活”。

提示要點：（1）每天步行上學；（2）節(jié)約水電，不需要的時候關掉電開關(turn off the lights)和水龍頭(taps)；（3）充分使用紙張；（4）不適用塑料袋(plastic bags)……

要求：1. 詞數(shù)：120詞左右；

2. 不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名、學校名等信息；

3. 文章內(nèi)容包括所給提示內(nèi)容，可適當發(fā)揮，文章的開頭已經(jīng)給出。

這種類型的寫作要求我們不是沒有遇到過。注意，我強調(diào)的是 “寫作要求” ，就是說像上文這樣，文章的主體部分都在 “提示要點” 中給我們列好，而且要求你們寫的 “文章內(nèi)容包括所給提示內(nèi)容”，當然，你也 “可適當發(fā)揮” 。這句話的意思是：我給你的提示要點一個都不能少，還能發(fā)揮什么，那就是你自己的本事了。那么問題來了，有些同學（而且還是寫作能力很不錯的同學）的問題是發(fā)揮是盡情發(fā)揮了，但是要求必須在文章中提到的4個提示要點就挑著來寫了。這樣導致的后果就是，即便你發(fā)揮得再精彩，你依然是沒有達到基本要求的。如果按一個提示要點2分算，你少寫一個就可以扣你兩分，不管你其他寫得多么好，詞匯句式多么高級，語法多么正確，你都很難拿到很高的分數(shù)，因為你犯了一個最不應該的錯誤：審題不認真！這個問題我上學期已經(jīng)跟大家強調(diào)過，很明顯，你們還沒完全放在心上。

這樣的寫作要求，我認為對在寫作內(nèi)容方面比較薄弱的同學很友善的，開頭給我們了，要點也都在那兒了，你一個一個按要求寫下來，每個要點再用多一兩個句子去解釋擴充一下，最后再起一段總結(jié)一下，就是一篇很完整的文章了。即便沒寫出什么新意，但只要詞匯短語句式恰當，沒有明顯的語法錯誤，拿個8分以上綽綽有余。在文章結(jié)構(gòu)方面，因為你擴充不了太多內(nèi)容，那你就把幾個要點放在一段寫，一篇總分總結(jié)構(gòu)的文章就出來了。

而對于那些很能寫的同學來說，每個點其實都可以用一些更具體的細節(jié)去拓展，而不是泛泛而談，蜻蜓點水。可以在內(nèi)容方面做到很詳實的同學，每一個要點都能夠獨立成一段，這樣子你就有足夠的空間可以發(fā)揮，文章結(jié)構(gòu)也會很清晰，只要沒太多語法錯誤，邏輯能夠自洽，那也一定會是高分作文。但是切記，除非你真的非常小心，不然寫多錯多這個坑真的很容易踩。

下面和大家分享的幾篇作文，并不是一開始就能寫得這么好的。作為考場作文，他們的原始版本也已經(jīng)算是很不錯的文章，但是最終分享出來的結(jié)果，還是經(jīng)過了一定的修改，當然除了一些小的語法錯誤由我指出，其他如果是涉及作文框架或者內(nèi)容的修改，主要還是靠他們自己，足見這些同學的寫作水平。我們一起努力花時間改出來的作文，我希望大家每篇都要認真讀幾遍，這些作文拿出來，比網(wǎng)上很多所謂范文，還有一些作文書的范文還要好很多倍。好的文章是修改出來的，在每一次的修改和反思過程中，你的寫作能力也會一點一點進步。希望大家多多閱讀這些同學的優(yōu)秀文章，推敲他們的寫作思維和方式，在你自己的寫作風格還沒定型之前，你甚至可以模仿。勤讀，勤積累，勤動筆，寫作才能進步。

My Low-carbon Life ? ? 彭程

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world.We can start from living a low carbon life.

For starters, the pollution from cars is becoming more and more serious. Instead of cars,we can go to school on foot or by bike. It is beneficial to the environment. It's also a perfect way to lose your weight.?

Secondly, we should use clean energy like electricity. But everything shouldn't be wasted. I read an article yesterday. It said that there is a kind of corridor that can produce electricity when we jump and run on it.We don't have this invention yet, but we can still save the energy. My family seldom turn on the lights and let the sunshine come into my house. We should realize that water is important too. In fact, we have much less water than everybody thinks. We can turn off the tap if we don't have to use it. And we can take a short shower instead of having a bath.

Then, it is the paper. Long time ago, my mom often used paper randomly and threw them away though it could be reused. However, now my family is able to use paper in a better way. Every part of it is very helpful for us. We hardly print one side. If it really can't be reused for us, we will recycle the paper.

Last but not least, I hate to buy stuffs with a plastic bag. Surely it is cheap, but it results in white pollution. Why can't we use our own cloth bags?

We have the ability to change the world and this is our responsibility. All of us should do our best to make a better life and I'm sure that it is absolutely not a imagination!

My Low-carbon Life ? ? 黎睿

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

You know what? Every day when you go to school by cars, you are polluting the world. You may think that you are only a single person and that doesn’t really matter. However,? try to imagine what the world will be when everybody thinks like you. Try to go somewhere on foot. Walking is good for your health. If the place you go is really far, just take the bus.

Beside, you can also use less water and electricity. Here are two really simple things to do: First, turn off the lights and taps. Second, take a shower instead of soaking in the bath. Who are most likely to kill the world? People who are using too much water and electricity.

What’s more, use less paper. If you have no idea about that, never mind, I have a piece of advice for you: use both sides of the paper. For example, I will use the other side of this piece of paper later. Every second, there are trees being cut down and there is paper becoming less and less.?

I bet you’ve heard of someone saying like this : "Don’t use plastic bags!” And I also bet you have known this a lot. However, I still have to give you some pieces of advice for dos instead of don'ts. Although there are some plastic bags that can be used again and again today, they are still not the best choice when you are shopping. Buy a? cloth bag, that’s quite easy to get one, isn’t it? Stop using plastic bags is really something.

That’s my low carbon life. How about yours? Let the human race work together against pollution. Heal the world, every common man has his obligation.

My Low-carbon Life ?? 陳立恒

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

What is low carbon life? For example, if you waste little in your daily life, you are having a low carbon life. But how to do that? I would like to share with you about my low carbon life and how can you do it.

There’s a question: Do you go to school on foot? If you do, you are having a low carbon life. Wait, I’m not encouraging those students who live far away from the school to go to school on foot, but maybe you should try going to school by bus or underground. Well, my home is far away from school, so I go to school by underground and I am seldom late.

Speaking of saving water and electricity, I will always turn off the lights and taps when I don’t need them. That doesn’t sound hard. Some of you might like to take a bath, but for decreasing wasting, I suggest that you have a shower. It is faster and it causes less wasting.

When you’re at school, what should you do? I use both sides of paper at school, I think it’s a good habit. So why don’t you use both sides of paper, just like me? If your classmates make fun of you, don’t be nervous, you’re fighting against pollution!?

What’s more, remember to use your own shopping bags instead of plastic bags when you’re buying snacks after school. I eat a lot at school, as a result, I seldom buy snacks after school. But I think it’s difficult for some of you. There is always someone hungry at school!

“Everything is difficult at the beginning ”, don’t give up at first and you’ll find the joy of having a low carbon life!

My Low-carbon Life ?? 朱子文

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

First of all, we should go out by bikes or on foot more but seldom by cars, because vehicle exhaust is the major source of air pollution. Low-carbon transportation is also good for our health, so why not try it?

Next, we should save water and electricity. We should switch off the lights when we don’t use them and reuse the water as possible as we can. For example, the water that your mother uses in washing vegetables can be reused to water plants. That’s a really good way to keep the plants healthy and energetic.

In addition, we should use both sides of a piece of paper in our daily lives. This can reduce the use of paper. Paper is valuable for we human beings, isn't it ? So try your best to make full use of it.

What’s more, we should reduce the use of disposable wooden things and organize our classmates and friends to plant trees spontaneously on every Arbor Day. Trees are really important for us and they can purify the air. Do something to protect them.

Last but not least, we should stop using plastic bags. Maybe you think that plastic bags are necessary, but they are really bad for the environment and they are also the main cause of white pollution.

There is no doubt that it’s high time that we should live with low carbon to protect the Earth. If I were you, I would do it right know. ?

My Low-carbon Life ?? 盧姿羽

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

We can go to school on foot and this can make the air cleaner and coole. Today a lot of students like to go to school by cars but cars always make a lot of harmful gases. This pollutes the air, so walking to school is a perfect way. Some students' homes are far away from their school, but I think that riding a bike to get to school is a good idea.

Saving water and electricity is also the best way to protect environment. We can turn off the lights and taps if we don’t need to use them.Taking a short shower instead of having a bath. Speaking of water, there are something more we can do.?We can use reusable water to plant trees. This will not waste water. People can’t live without water so we must try our best to protect it.

Next, We can use our own bags but not plastic bags. Because plastic bags are difficult to be recycled and they will produce more rubbish and then pollute the air. Air is really important for humans and also important for a lot of creatures. However, people are using factories to produce what they need and this pollutes the air. So we should try our best to close some factories.?

Earth is home to all creatures. I can’t imagine that some day we lose the Earth. So please do your best to protect the Earth.

My Low-carbon Life ?? 樂怡宸

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

Maybe you’ll be curious about “What is a low-carbon life?” Low-carbon life is a life that can protect the environment. I’m a student who want to protect the environment. So I started to live a Low-carbon life many years ago. I always go to school on foot, but not by car. When I need to print my homework, I always think if there is a way that doesn’t need to print. In the use of paper, I usually write on both sides of a piece of paper. Because the tree is one of the most important resources. During the COVID-19, we often wash our hands. Every time I wash my hands, I turn off the tap when I am using soap. I always turn off the lights when I go out. Every day, I take a shower instead of a bath. Although I seldom go shopping, I always use my shopping bag, because every time you use a plastic bag, it takes thousands of years to dissolve. When I eat out, I never use one-off chopsticks, they are not green.?

Those things above must be easy for everyone to do, but few people can stick to it. Of course everybody wants to protect the environment. So let's start from now while it is still not too late !

My Low-carbon Life ?? 吳祖康

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

In my opinion, Low-carbon Life is useful. It not only helps us to save money but also protects the Earth as well.

Now you must want to ask me, what is Low-carbon, right ? I think Low-carbon Life means that you must stop wasting electricity and water. I think Low-carbon is good for us. So what can we do in our daily life to lead a low-carbon life?

First, we must walk to school if our home is close to our school. I can't do it because my home is really far away from school. But I hope you guys can do it.

Next, we must save water and electricity. We must turn off the lights and taps if we don't need them. I can do it very well. My parents always forget to turn off the lights after they use the toilet. So I always remind them. I am careful, right ?

After that, we must save paper ! Why ? Because paper is made from trees. We can't imagine the world without trees. So stop wasting paper please !

Finally, we must stop using plastic bags. We should use our bags to go shopping.

I know all of these are easy for you to complete, aren't they? Let's get started together .

My Low-carbonLife ? ? 金秋然

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

There is no doubt that the Earth is becoming warmer. But no one knows the effects of global warming. I think a low-carbon life will be helpful, and I also stick to it.?

In my life, I go to school by bike every day, and I never go to school by car or by taking a taxi. As a matter of fact, I also tell my parents to walk to work instead of driving the car. If I am not using the lights, the TV, the computer, and so on. I would turn them off. I make full use of papers, and I go shopping with baskets rather than plastic bags. Oh, I also plant trees in my family garden, as they absorb carbon dioxide from the air and fresh my spirit when I look at them.

Remember, by getting together, individuals can make a difference. Our contribution counts!

My Low-carbon Life ?? 彭沁伊

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

First, we should go to school on foot. If your home far away from school , you can try to ride a bike. Second, don’t use too much water and lights. If we don’t need water and lights, please turn them off. Still, don’t use too much water to wash our bodies. We must always remember turn off the taps. Third, we shouldn’t use too much paper , because if we use much paper, some people have to cut down lots of trees. So the thing is, we can write on both sides of a piece of paper. Fourth, don’t use plastic things.? For example, plastic bags and plastic bottles. If you use?plastic things, remember not to throw them on the ground. It will pollute the Earth. We must throw plastic in rubbish bin. I think I got it, how about you?

In fact, Earth is ill because of human’s destroying. We cut down many of the trees. Therefore, many animals, birds and insects lost their homes. I think maybe one day, we will lose our home too. So , please do our best to protect the Earth !

Let us lead a Low-carbon life ! It’s time for the Earth to have a rest .?

My Low-carbonLife ?? 駱冠宏

We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.

In order to live a low-carbon life, we must start with small things. For example, when we go to school, we can go to school on foot or by bike, or at least take a bus. When we are at home, we need to use less water, and we also need to remind ourselves that we should use less water for bathing. I personally suggest that we should not take a bath because it will waste a lot of water. We should reduce the use of electricity at home as well. When we don't need electricity, turn off all the lights. What else can we do ? We need to save paper in order to live a low-carbon life. We need to use both the front and the back of a piece of paper. By the way, do not use plastic bags when buying vegetables. We can prepare our own shopping bags. And we can do many other things, such as participating in tree planting activities.?

As you can see, low carbon life starts from small things.

在編輯你們這些文章的時候，我真心覺得，你們還是很會寫的！Soooooo...proud of you guys! 不要停下你們手中的筆，一直寫下去吧，你們一定會越寫越好的！