今天我們一起來(lái)學(xué)習(xí)一下雅思小作文柱狀圖的寫(xiě)作。
今天若水給大家挑選的雅思小作文題目是：
The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 – 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
下面是若水給大家寫(xiě)的高分范文：
The bar graph illustrates the number of international students from four countries (China, Japan, America and Russia) that a European university admitted in a five year period from 2004 to 2008.
Generally speaking, the international students coming from China and America constitute a significant majority of the student populace while Russia sends the lowest number of international applicants to the university in Europe with its students figure accounting for less than 10%. The total number of students each year of the four countries reflects a slight undulatory upward trend to 55,000 from around 45,000 at the bottom during the first four years (2004 to 2007).
During the five year time span (2004 to 2008), both the number of international students from China and Russia dropped to some extent. China experienced a steady decline in the number of students studying in the European university from 2004 to 2006 from 27,000 to 17,000 and remained constant in the following year (2007) then a slight fall in 2008 to 15,000. While Russia witnessed a significant eight time rise in the first four years (2004 to 2007) from 1000 to 8000 yet a sharp fall to 4000 in 2008.
Nevertheless, the number of Japanese international students continuously increased and doubled to 10,000 from 5000 in the five year period. In contrast, the figure of American overseas candidates decreased noticeably from 20,000 to 15,000 in the first two years (2004 to 2005), then went up slightly from 15,000 to 17,500 in the following two years (2005 to 2006). The figure then plummeted a good proportion from 17,500 to the bottom at 10000 from 2006 to 2007 until peaked at 27,500 in 2008.
寫(xiě)作點(diǎn)評(píng)：
這篇小作文第一段我對(duì)題目做了同義改寫(xiě)，第二段我主要報(bào)告了我從圖表中發(fā)現(xiàn)的兩大主要特征即最大留學(xué)生來(lái)源地和5年年度四國(guó)留學(xué)生總?cè)藬?shù)走勢(shì)。第三段主體段我報(bào)告了2004至2008年5年期間留學(xué)生人數(shù)下降的中國(guó)和俄國(guó)的情況。第四段我主要報(bào)告的是留學(xué)生人數(shù)穩(wěn)定上升的日本和留學(xué)生人數(shù)波動(dòng)較大的美國(guó)的情況。
我描述和報(bào)告本柱狀圖和對(duì)圖表中出現(xiàn)的各個(gè)項(xiàng)目的分組的思路是數(shù)量的極值、總體趨勢(shì)變化、上升、下降、持平和波動(dòng)的情況。建議大家把概述總體特征的段落寫(xiě)在第二位，因?yàn)檫@一段可以對(duì)全文做一個(gè)統(tǒng)領(lǐng)，同時(shí)對(duì)于拿到一個(gè)理想的雅思小作文寫(xiě)作分?jǐn)?shù)非常重要。如果放在末尾因?yàn)闀r(shí)間關(guān)系完成不了就會(huì)非常遺憾。
好了，今天的雅思小作文寫(xiě)作分享到此結(jié)束。多謝瀏覽和關(guān)注，我們下一期講壇再會(huì)。
